[Music] in this video we are going to write a task to response to a question seen recently on the IELTS the question reads some people think that the government should invest money in arts and culture while others believe the government should spend money on more important things discuss both views and give your opinion you can see below a few notes I quickly made to myself after reading the question to help prompt me as I write this essay out so firstly like all IELTS essays the response is very likely going to be four paragraphs in length so we can already be prepared for that the instruction words request we discuss both views so we know we are going to use a discussion essay approach and that means declaring both points of view in the introduction and then analyzing them in turn in the body paragraphs an optional link we might tack to the end of each body paragraph is an acknowledgement of merit if our writing progresses in a way that makes it appropriate to do so I usually try to declare at least one merit for each point of view and then perhaps reveal any disadvantages to a point of view while comparing them in the second body paragraph or in the conclusion paragraph while I’m brainstorming and creating these quick notes I try to make note of any relevant example that comes to mind that could be used in the body paragraphs if I can’t think of one I will start the writing process and then hope that something will come to mind as I get to to the body paragraphs and if I can’t think of anything in that moment then I will just make up an example which is a strategy that can help you sometime in the exam I think the Beijing opera could play a good example of how government funding of arts and culture can be helpful to a country for two reasons one is it encourages soft the soft power of the country and it also helps to create a sense of identity and I’m going to look at both of these points as I flesh this essay out in the second body paragraph I will share an example of a painting that was purchased for the National Art Gallery in Canada but unfortunately it displeased the public so this paragraph should show some healthy contrast between the two points of view and should help lead the essay towards its conclusion in the fourth paragraph now actually before I even start writing the essay I already have a clear sense of what the conclusion is going to be I feel that it would be impossible to prescribe a set rate of spending for all governments when it comes to arts and culture so I know now that I’m going to conclude the at this essay by recommending that the many differences and nuances between nations means they are best to decide what spending is most appropriate for them but remember that the nature of this essay as a discussion essay dictates an objective approach so I’m not going to declare this position until the very end of the essay in this conclusion paragraph now you can see that in these notes I’ve included a few phrases you can see that these sentences are kind of stalk ish phrases I mean of course you want to adapt them to your own writing but they’re very common to discussion essays in general so it’s sometimes helpful to to have a few of these in mind that you can tailor to the needs of your essay so these items and the quick notes that I’ve pulled together here should help accelerate us through the writing Pro and in creating a plan like this it also helps ensure the SA has a strong sense of cohesion and faithfulness to the essay question just having some overarching plan like this can help move your essay towards quality okay so I’m going to start fleshing out the essay so I’m just going to delete these points as we as we move through them here so the first thing we want to do is deliver a sort of broad statement on the topic that we can narrow to the two points of view so I’m just gonna quickly read the questions myself again so some people think the government should invest money in arts and culture while others believe the government should spend money on more important things discuss both views and give your opinion okay so so we might want to say something about that the nature of how governments use money is an often debated topic right just to sort of ease us into into the essay so the manner in which nation decides how to use public funding is and just use that an often debated topic okay and that we want to get into declaring the two points of view so maybe for some providing financial support to a nation’s arts and culture is seen as healthy or I’m gonna say necessary however others see all this money is best spent elsewhere let’s say okay so that’s the two points of view that we have declared right so when the examiner reads this they’re very clear on the two positions that are going to be looked at now we want to finish this introduction paragraph with a very clear statement of how we’re going to approach this this issue or this discussion and that’s where this sentence fits in so this essay will analyze both opinions before a reasoned conclusion is reached and of course you can switch this sentence around any way you need so perhaps you could say something like before arriving at a recent conclusion and then ticket is reached we could change analyze to examine we could change opinions two points of view so let’s go to the first body paragraph okay I noted to myself one way to start the paragraph so we’re gonna look at the first point of view which is providing financial support to a nation’s arts and culture is seen as necessary so as many argue let’s say fostering a nation’s arts and culture is a wise use of government funding okay now as I mentioned we are going to look at the Beijing opera and we’re going to look at two positive outcomes of funding the traditions of the Beijing opera so let me just stick that in here really quickly so there are several let’s say several merits to this position so the first point is that funding the Beijing opera and and preserving it helps to promote the traditions of China and it gives people sort of a historical window to look through into the the traditions of the nation so we could say something like for one financially supporting the arts and help establish or solidify maybe historical record and understanding so for one financially supporting the arts can help solidify historical record and understanding and now we want to use our example of the page number so in China let’s say that a lot of money is used to preserve the Beijing opera so a tremendous money is sent here to preserve and promote these traditions the Beijing opera and then just mention about giving people a window as I was saying or you know sort of some historical perspective these efforts give modern people a window into pass okay this emerges worldwide same worldwide understanding China and it’s just real estate and you know what I can connect these together it’ll help the sentences flow a bit better so so far it reads as many argue fostering a nation’s arts and culture is a wise use of government funding there are several merits to this position for one financially supporting the arts can help solidify historical record and understanding in China for example a trim amount of money is spent every year to preserve and promote the traditions of the Beijing opera these efforts give modern people a window into the past and this encourages worldwide understanding of China and its history okay so that’s positive point number one that results from government spending in arts and culture now the second thing that I thought about in planning for this essay is that it helps to create a sense of identity for people which can have a stabilizing effect and that might be helpful to very large countries like China so maybe we could say something like another benefit okay now please notice these little bits that add in you know cohesion it’s it’s not just a benefit it’s another benefit it links to the the progression that came before it so another benefit is let’s say the the manner in which a strong arts and culture scene promotes national identity let’s see I’m just gonna switch the manner just because we used it at the beginning of the essay so another benefit is the way in which a strong arts and culture scene promotes national identity encouraging people to collectively identify with the historical arts and culture produced in their nation establishes just will say peace and stability or helps to establish peace and stability and let’s just point out this is helpful to large countries like China and large countries like China another benefit is the way in which a strong arts and culture scene promotes national identity encouraging people to collectively identify with the historical art and culture produced in their nation establishes peace and stability in large countries like China okay and and then I’m just going to tack on our so the advantages at this point of view are very clear which fits fine okay now in the second supporting the second body paragraph we want to look at the opposing point of view and include any bits of language that can show comparison between the two which will help generate an organic sense of conclusion when we get to the fourth paragraph so in this body paragraph other people however feel so we’re saying that government spending on arts and culture is wasteful and I was going to use the example of that painting from my home city so other people however feel such spending okay and once again these little bells and whistles that show your examiner that you’re able to write with a sense of cohesion so such spending is sort of with reference to the spending that we’ve been talking about earlier so on arts and culture such spending on our school is wasteful let’s see and neglects nations more pressing needs okay so other people who ever feel such spending on arts and culture is wasteful and neglects a nation’s more pressing needs okay so the example for example this is sort of your for instance an art gallery in my home once spent over doors on a large painting that displayed varying shades of white and it’s important to point out that most people felt this was a rather boring painting and a rather wasteful use of government funding so I’m just go stick in here a piece most people describe as dull okay for instance an art gallery my home city of ottawa once spent over a million dollars on a large painting that displayed varying shades of white a piece most people described as dull local residents found this this is Avis I’m gonna use the word municipal it was probably national spending but municipal move is tasteful see irresponsible and you’re responsible he’s really responsible and I want to say that they felt this way because the money could have been used elsewhere so maybe given the fact that money could have been put towards social projects like and then just fill in the blank with anything really like homeless or maybe like helping the homeless find steady employment okay okay and and then we can finish it there with this phrase it is thus understandable why many our own until you and as I was saying these these are kind of stock phrases but you can adapt them as you need so we could change this to I don’t think we’ve used the word support anywhere we’ve seen any supporters of this point of view or this position or these phrases just helped to create a sense of unity between the different paragraphs and a sense of closure to the position that we’re analyzing in this paragraph so you can see a very objective look at the the two sides we’ve shared something positive at least one thing positive for each side there is a bit of comparison we haven’t shared our personal opinion on any of it yet and we’re going to get to that in the conclusion paragraph but as I was saying my feeling on the matter is that you can’t really say one way or the other you know how governments should use money whether they should absolutely not put any spending into arts & culture or whether they should commit a lot of it darts and culture because it’s gonna be different depending on on the country’s needs so that’s what we’re going to say here in the fourth paragraph now I’ve already noted to myself declare that it is impossible to prescribe a set spending pattern for all governments and conclude that nations are best to decide on spending rates and amounts for themselves so that’s what we’re going to plug in here now we want to make reference to the discussion that has taken place so let’s say the above discussion illustrates how how the mild differences or nuances between countries make it let’s say I’m just gonna even use what I put here in my notes make it impossible to prescribe a set spending pattern for all governments and I might just recommend change there so the above discussion illustrates how nuances between countries make it impossible to recommend a set spending pattern for all governments okay and then our final note is just that nations are thus best to fund their arts and culture in accordance say to their specific needs okay I might just even just to demonstrate to the examiner some different language so nations are thus best to channel funding to their arts and culture in accordance to their specific needs anyways okay so that wraps up the essay now you can see that it as I was saying it’s a very clear very objective point of view there are lots of instances of cohesion which creates a nice flow to the entire essay and a good sense of linking between its various parts its faithful to the question throughout and let’s give it a final read and I’m gonna read the question as well so some people think that governments that the government should invest money in arts and culture while others believe the government should spend money on more important things discuss both views and give your opinion the manner in which a nation decides how to use public funding is often is an often debated topic for some providing financial support to a nation’s arts and culture is seen as necessary however others feel this money as best spent elsewhere this essay will examine both points of view before arriving at a recent conclusion as many argue fostering and nation’s arts and culture is a wise use of government funding there are several merits to this of this position for one financially supporting the arts can help solidify historical record and understanding in China for example a tremendous amount of money is spent every year to preserve and promote the traditions of the Beijing opera these efforts give modern people a window into the past and this encourages worldwide understanding of China and its history another benefit is the way in which a strong arts and culture scene promotes national identity encouraging people to collectively identify with the historical art and culture produced in their nation establishes peace and stability in large countries like China the advantages this point of view are thus very clear okay now we flipped around and look at the other side other people however feel such spending on arts and culture is wasteful and neglects the nation’s more pressing needs for instance in art gallery my home city of Ottawa once spent over a million dollars on a large painting that displayed varying shades of white a piece most people described as dull local residents found this municipal move distasteful and irresponsible given the fact the money could have been put towards social projects like helping the homeless find steady employment it is less understandable why many are supporters of this position and and again you know as you read through your essay and you check it you might actually want to add in certain things so I’m gonna stick in here alternative position now the final paragraph the above discussion illustrates how nuances between countries make it impossible to recommend a set spending pattern for all governments nations are thus best to channel funding to their arts and culture and accordance to their specific needs and this word makes a very nice link back to the sentence and all of discussion that has happened prior so our conclusion is very much a result of the discussion that we’ve demonstrated here so I hope that quick video was helpful and don’t forget to note some of the language you see here in your journal and review it don’t just watch this video and then walk away from it and not take anything from it there are lots of good instances of linking language good demonstration of a variety of vocabulary and this is a very relevant topic because this question was seen recently on the IELTS so get that journal out make some notes perhaps try writing this essay out word for word right – just copy it from the screen read it word for word try to produce it from memory and then try to adapt some of the the language items and play around with them so that you can become more familiar with accurate grammatical and like circle structures and start using these structures in your own writing thanks very much for watching we’ll see you next video [Music]

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